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The major movement around the world is absolutely "eco-friendly" campaign these days. 
>>> CORRECT
The leading countries declared that they would invest to the eco-friendly industries such as electric vehicles, carbon dioxide emissions and new renewable energy industries.
>>> CORRECT
 It means that we have already known the importance of our environment and global crisis due to the industrialization.
>>> CORRECT
 As part of green movement, it is required personnel to put the effort preventing our environment by practicing small things in their daily life like reducing single use items, recycles and refraining from use of vehicles. 
>>>  As a part of the green movement, it is required for personnel to put the effort in preventing our environment by practicing small things in their daily life like reducing disposable items, recycles and refraining from the use of vehicles.
Nevertheless, the environment problem is getting worse because of the excessive industrialization.
>>> Nevertheless, the environment's problem is getting worse because of the excessive industrialization.
 The trial of personnel can't be ignored but it actually doesn't affect the result a lot. 
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, major companies should carry out the effective policies for saving the world and also governments have to support them by providing all the things to achieve our goals.
>>> CORRECT
 Individuals should continue to do things...
>>> CORRECT
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