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Which one do you think is better, being a boss or being a leader? Explain your answer.

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In my opinion, being a leader is better than being a boss.
A boss is just a high person at a company, and being a boss doesn't help anything for other people.
A leader is a high person in a sciety, and being a great leader helps people to live nicely.
I think being a leader is much harder than being a boss.
Because a leader is more higher than a boss and because of it, a leader has planty of responsibilities.
But I have a confidence about being a leader, so I think being a leader is better than being a boss for me.

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Hi John! :)

boss manages their employees, while a leader inspires them to innovate, think creatively, and strive for perfection. Every team has a boss, but what people need is a leader who will help them achieve greatness.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In my opinion, being a leader is better than being a boss.
>> CORRECT

A boss is just a high person at a company, and being a boss doesn't help anything for other people.
>> A boss is just a person with a high position in a company. And being a boss doesn't help anyone in their company. 

A leader is a high person in a sciety, and being a great leader helps people to live nicely.
>> A leader is a considered a respected person in a society and they usually help people live nicely. 

I think being a leader is much harder than being a boss.
>> CORRECT

Because a leader is more higher than a boss and because of it, a leader has planty of responsibilities.
>> Being a leader is better than being a boss because they usually have plenty of responsibilities but still does it well. 

But I have a confidence about being a leader, so I think being a leader is better than being a boss for me.
>> I think I have the confidence in being a leader
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