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I think it is spending time with my family and have a good time. It is important to have a lot of time with close people.

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Long weekends are the perfect opportunity to get out and about. So, to spend them in front of the television would be almost criminal.The key here is balance. You certainly don¡¯t have to plan each moment of the long weekend. But making time for a few activities can leave you recharged and happier once the holiday has passed.

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I think it is spending time with my family and have a good time. 
>> I think it is spending time with my family and having a good time. 

It is important to have a lot of time with close people.
>> It is important to have a lot of time with people we are close with. 
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