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Q:Chuseok is Korea's thanksgiving day, on that note, can you tell me what are thankful for?
A:I don't know why Chuseok is thanksgiving day in our country, but I know when is Chuseok.
Chuseok is second day when the moon is biggest and it's usually September or October.
And people eat some Chuseok food like Songpyeon or Persimmon, and some of them do Charye like us.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I don't know why Chuseok is thanksgiving day in our country, but I know when is Chuseok.

>> I don't know why Chuseok is Thanksgiving Day in our country, but I know when is Chuseok.
Chuseok is second day when the moon is biggest and it's usually September or October.

>> Chuseok is the second day of the year when the moon is at its biggest and it's usually in September or October.
And people eat some Chuseok food like Songpyeon or Persimmon, and some of them do Charye like us.

>> People eat some Chuseok food like Songpyeon or Persimmon, and some of them do Charye like us.

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