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What do you think is the perfect thing to do this upcoming long weekend?

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I have a lot of hobbies and one of them is watch a movie with my family or my friends.
If is fun to watch a movie with my family or my friends and I can be moved by the story of the movie.
Also I can grow my imagination and sensitivity by watch a movie and sharing my ideas about the movie.
So I like to watch a movie with my family or my friends and I usually watch a movie when I am bored.
Before Covid-19, I met a lot of people and whole family during the long weekend like Chu Seok.
But now, I can't met my whole family because of the Covid-19.
So it is too boring to spend my time in Chu Seok because there is anything to do.
So I think preparing a lot of movies for the long weekend is the perfect thing to do.

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Hi John! :)

Long weekends are the perfect opportunity to get out and about. So, to spend them in front of the television would be almost criminal.The key here is balance. You certainly don¡¯t have to plan each moment of the long weekend. But making time for a few activities can leave you recharged and happier once the holiday has passed.

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I have a lot of hobbies and one of them is watch a movie with my family or my friends.
>> I have a lot of hobbies and one of them is watching movies with my family or friends. 

If is fun to watch a movie with my family or my friends and I can be moved by the story of the movie.
>> If is fun to watch movies with my family or my friends and I can also be moved by the story of the movie.

Also I can grow my imagination and sensitivity by watch a movie and sharing my ideas about the movie.
>> Also, I can grow my imagination and sense of sensitivity by watching and sharing my thought about the movie. 

So I like to watch a movie with my family or my friends and I usually watch a movie when I am bored.
>> So I like to watch a movie with my family or my friends especially when I am bored. 

Before Covid-19, I met a lot of people and whole family during the long weekend like Chu Seok.
>> Before Covid-19, I used to meet a lot of people  during the long weekend of Chu Seok.

But now, I can't met my whole family because of the Covid-19.
>> CORRECT

So it is too boring to spend my time in Chu Seok because there is anything to do.
>> So it is too boring to spend my time in Chu Seok because there nothing else to do. 

So I think preparing a lot of movies for the long weekend is the perfect thing to do.
>> CORRECT
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