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Q:Chuseok is Korea's thanksgiving day, on that note, can you tell me what are thankful for?
A:I didn't know that Chuseok is our country's thanksgiving day, but I know something about Chuseok.
Chuseok is second day when the moon is biggest and it's usually September or October.
And most of Koreans eat Chuseok food like Songpyeon and persimmon and also they play some traditional games like yut play.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I didn't know that Chuseok is our country's thanksgiving day, but I know something about Chuseok.

>> I didn't know that Chuseok is our country's Thanksgiving Day, but I know something about Chuseok.
Chuseok is second day when the moon is biggest and it's usually September or October.

>> Chuseok is the second day when the moon is at its biggest and it's usually in September or October.
And most of Koreans eat Chuseok food like Songpyeon and persimmon and also they play some traditional games like yut play.

>> Most Koreans eat Chuseok food like Songpyeon and persimmon, and they also play some traditional games like yut play.

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