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Most part of my body:brain

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Frankly, i have to love all of my body parts. But I love my brain the most. I'll cite very important reason why i love brain the most. Because brain makes me think, and control my all of body. So I think brain is main part of my body parts. And thinking is main personality of human. Though animals have brain, but human's brain is more intelligent and deep than animal's brain. So I love my brain that is special.

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Frankly, i have to love all of my body parts. 
>> I have to love all of my body parts.

But I love my brain the most.
>> However, I love my brain the most.

 I'll cite very important reason why i love brain the most. 
>> I'll cite a very important reason why I love it the most. 

Because brain makes me think, and control my all of body. 
>> My brain makes me think and controls my body. 

So I think brain is main part of my body parts. 
>> Therefore, I think it is a major body part.

And thinking is main personality of human. 
>> In addition, thinking is the main trait of humans.

Though animals have brain, but human's brain is more intelligent and deep than animal's brain. 
>> Though animals have brains, humans are more intelligent and deep. 

So I love my brain that is special.
>> Hence, I love my brain. It is special.

Hi, Daniel!  Thank you for doing your homework! It is well-organized and easy to understand. 

Please take note of the ff:

a.  The pronoun ¡°I¡± is always capitalized.

b. Use pronouns to avoid writing the same nouns over and over.

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