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Sorry.. I think it's an considerable amount that you are going to revise. Thank u~

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Thank you for sharing, Shin! 

If you will have any questions about the revisions in this entry, you know how to reach me. ^^ Thank you. ^^

~Elica~

My favorite teacher was the physical education teacher when I was a middle school student. 

>>CORRECT

Physical education was my favorite class and I enjoyed to talk to him because he was so funny and always made sense our minds. 

>> Physical education was my favorite class and I enjoyed talking to him because he was so funny and always made sense in our min

When I was 20years old, I visited the middle school, but I couldn't meet him because he was transferred to other school.

>>When I was 20years old, I visited the middle school, but I couldn't meet him because he was transferred to another school.

 

Yes, I do. 

>>CORRECT

Actually, I don't think that I¡¯m gifted to teaching, but I hope I¡¯m going to teach Korean and Korean cultures to foreigners when I live in other countries. 

>>Yes, I do. Actually, I don't think that I¡¯m gifted in teaching, but I hope I¡¯m going to teach Korean and Korean cultures to foreigners when I live in other countries. 

Moreover, if I come back to Korea after the graduation of a college, I¡¯m going to try to teach English to Korean students because I hope they learn English more easily and more naturally.

>>Moreover, if I come back to Korea after graduation from college, I¡¯m going to try to teach English to Korean students because I hope they learn English easier and more naturally.

 

It¡¯s not a lot, but I love to collect glasses. 

>>CORRECT

I have five glasses and want to buy more but I subdue the desire for glasses due to money. 

>>I have five pairs of glasses and want to buy more but I subdued the desire for glasses due to money.

These days, glasses are not only for vision correction but also they are for fashion, so I have various types of glasses for my image.

>>These days, glasses are not only for vision correction but also for fashion, so I have various types of glasses for my image. 

 

I prefer listen to live music, but it¡¯s actually not easy because an admission fee is expensive and it takes quite long time to get to concert hall, so I enjoy watching singers¡¯ live music videos instead of going to concert.

>>I prefer to listen to live music, but it¡¯s actually not easy because the admission fee is expensive and it takes a quite long time to get to the concert halls, so I enjoy watching singers¡¯ live music videos instead of going to the concerts.

 

I learned to play a guitar by my friend. 

>>I learned to play the guitar with my friend. 

the title of the song was ¸ðµç³¯, ¸ðµç¼ø°£, which means ¡°every day, every moment¡±. 

>>The title of the song was ¸ðµç³¯, ¸ðµç¼ø°£, which means ¡°every day, every moment¡±. 

When I learned a guitar for the first time, it was a challenge because it was more difficult to control my fingers than I thought. 

>>When I learned to play the guitar for the first time, it was a challenge because it was more difficult to control my fingers than I thought. 

However, I finally mastered the song and realized at that time ¡°Enjoyment is the best training¡±.

>>However, I finally mastered the song and realized at that time that ¡°Enjoyment is the best training¡±.


 

There is a good chance that students can discover their musical talents at the early age and become the best players in the world.

>>There is a good chance that students can discover their musical talents at an early age and become the best players in the world.

 

I think it is difficult to study and practice a musical instrument without a teacher. 

>>CORRECT

I believe it takes more time to master it due to more trials and errors. 

>>CORRECT

studying alone is likely going to give it up than learning a teacher.

>>Learning alone can more likely make you give it up than learning with a teacher.

 

 

 


 

 

 

 

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