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Is it good to experience difficulties in life?

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I think experiencing difficulties is good for people to develop empathy and coping ability.

First of all, people can understand other people's situation by experiencing difficulties. It is hard to fully comprehend other people's difficulties without walking in their shoes. If people can grasp the reason on people's behavior, they are more likely to understand those who are suffering from hardships. Therefore, they can be a good advisor or friends and help them to get over a difficult hardships, and this process would contribute the development of empathy ability.

Second, people can study a variety ways to cope with different kinds of situations. People have trouble in something, when they have the lack of experience in specific situation. Even though many people moan under the process of figuring out a solution, once they overcome the bad situations, they could understand a variety of complicated issues, be flexible in the similar environment in the future.

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Thank you for taking the time to make this composition. Well Done Ye Jin! - Teacher Ivy

I think experiencing difficulties is good for people to develop empathy and coping ability.

>> Correct
First of all, people can understand other people's situation by experiencing difficulties.

>>Correct
It is hard to fully comprehend other people's difficulties without walking in their shoes.

>> Correct

If people can grasp the reason on people's behavior, they are more likely to understand those who are suffering from hardships.

>> Correct

Therefore, they can be a good advisor or friends and help them to get over a difficult hardships, and this process would contribute the development of empathy ability.
>> Correct
Second, people can study a variety ways to cope with different kinds of situations.

>> Correct

People have trouble in something, when they have the lack of experience in specific situation.

>> People have trouble in something, if they have lack of experience in a specific situation.

Even though many people moan under the process of figuring out a solution, once they overcome the bad situations, they could understand a variety of complicated issues, be flexible in the similar environment in the future.

>> Correct

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