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If you can make a rule in your school, what would it be and why?

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In my school, there is a rule that all students must wear a school uniform.
But most of my school students, especially second and third grade don't wear the uniform.
And school teachers don't do anything to second and third grade.
But they always talk to first grade students like "You shouldn't have to not wear athe uniform.".
And I think school uniform is not that important and actually it doesn't have any effect.
So I want to make a rule in my school, 'You can wear any clothes in the school.'.

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Hi John! :)

Rules are established to protect the weaker class in the society since they are at a disadvantage if such regulations are broken. When rules are properly set and followed, they provide a stable environment and human co-existence in a community, resulting in peace and order. 

I think your suggestion is good. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In my school, there is a rule that all students must wear a school uniform.
>> CORRECT

But most of my school students, especially second and third grade don't wear the uniform.
>> But most students in my school, especially second and third grade, don't wear uniforms. 

And school teachers don't do anything to second and third grade.
>> And the school teacher's don't do anything about it. 

But they always talk to first grade students like "You shouldn't have to not wear athe uniform.".
>> But when it comes to the first graders, they always say that we should wear out school uniforms always. 

And I think school uniform is not that important and actually it doesn't have any effect.
>>I think wearing school uniforms are not that important and it doesn't have any effect to the way we study. 

So I want to make a rule in my school, 'You can wear any clothes in the school.'.
>> So I want to make a rule in my school that students can wear civilian clothes all the time. 
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