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Korean imaginary creature: HATAE

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I will introduce Korean mythical creature: HATAE. It's a symbol of Seoul city. Then why HATAE is so important or great?
HATAE means justice. So its statue is at the Law institute. About 500 years ago, its role was control the staff(?) of law and protect that staff.
(Frankly, HATAE isn't just Korean god, it is also in Japan and China. But the meanings of it are different.)

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I will introduce Korean mythical creature: HATAE.
>> I will write about the Korean mythical creature: Hatae. 

It's a symbol of Seoul city.
>> It's the symbol of Seoul City.

Then why HATAE is so important or great?
>> Why is Hatae so important?

HATAE means justice.
>> It means justice.

So its statue is at the Law institute.
>> Therefore, its statue is at a law institute.

About 500 years ago, its role was control the staff(?) of law and protect that staff.
>> About 500 years ago, its role was to control the legal staff and protect them.

(Frankly, HATAE isn't just Korean god, it is also in Japan and China. But the meanings of it are different.)
>> Moreover, Hatae isn't Just a Korean god. It is also in Japan and China, but the meanings are different.


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