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How different do you think is the generation now from the generation before?

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I think technologies are developmented. And people are more interested in devices like iphone or samsung. Moreover as covid19, people do make something like Dalgona coffee and omlet etc.

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Hi Yun! :)

The difference between the older generation and new generation really is the technology. Because the older generation does not have that much technology. Despite that, people learn easily to adapt to the certain changes that are happening. 

I think your answer is great. :) 

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I think technologies are developmented. 
>> I think technology has developed. 

And people are more interested in devices like iphone or samsung. 
>> And, more people are interested in different devices like iPhone or Samsung phones. 

Moreover as covid19, people do make something like Dalgona coffee and omlet etc.
>> Moreover, as Covid-19 started, people do a lot of things like Dalgona coffee, omeletes and etc. 
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