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What do you miss most about your life preCOVID19?

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What I miss most is traveling abroad. At the outbreak of COVID 19, I made an arrangement of travelling to North Europe with my mom in February last year. The trip was my first trip to North Europe and I was looking forward a lot. In addition, I hoped it would be a great time with my mom who is getting old. At first, I insisted on going on trips though the viru started to be prevalent, the rest of my family stopped me from traveling with mom because that seemed to be dangerous to my mom, too. I could not help canceling the trip. I took risk of paying a fine for cancellation. Luckily, the arranged trip was not available due to a lack of reservations by cancellation, so I didn¡¯t have to pay a fine for that. It was worth waiting for for the end. Because of the Pandemic, my friend and family are reluctant to go far away from home. I really hope to end this pandemic soon and to be back to as normal as pre COVID 19.

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What I miss most is traveling abroad.
>> This is a good sentence. 

At the outbreak of COVID 19, I made an arrangement of travelling to North Europe with my mom in February last year.
>> In February of last year, at the outbreak of COVID19, I made travel arrangements for North Europe for me and my mom.

The trip was my first trip to North Europe and I was looking forward a lot.
>> It was supposed to be my first trip to North Europe, so I was looking forward to it.

In addition, I hoped it would be a great time with my mom who is getting old. 
>>  In addition, I had hoped it would be a great time with my mom, who is getting old. 

At first, I insisted on going on trips though the viru started to be prevalent,  the rest of my family stopped me from traveling with mom because that seemed to be dangerous to my mom, too.
>>  At first, I insisted on going on trips though the virus had started to be prevalent.  The rest of my family stopped me from traveling with my mom because that seemed to be dangerous for her, too.

I could not help canceling the trip.
>> This is a good sentence. 

 I took risk of paying a fine for cancellation. 
>> I took the risk of paying the fine for cancelation.

Luckily, the arranged trip was not available due to a lack of reservations by cancellation, so I didn¡¯t have to pay a fine for that.
>> Luckily, the arranged trip was not available due to a lack of reservations by cancellation, so I didn¡¯t have to pay the fine for that.

 It was worth waiting for for the end. 
>> It was worth waiting for.

Because of the Pandemic, my friend and family are reluctant to go far away from home.
>> Because of the pandemic, my friend and my family are reluctant to go far away from home.

I really hope to end this pandemic soon and to be back to as normal as pre COVID 19.
>> I really hope this pandemic will end soon and everything will be back to normal. 

Hi, Sun Jung! I'm sorry about your canceled trip. I hope you could go to North Europe with your mom soon.   But for now, let's all be patient and stay at home so that we won't get infected.  
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