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HOMEWORK: What was the happiest moment of your life?

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As I remember, when I was about 11years old, my family went on a trip for a week.
Because my parents always busy for working, we could only had a short trip.
But, in that summer we had vacation for a week.
we didn't set a destination. when we were hungry, my father parked a car near river or sea and my mother made meals.
Someday we played on the beach and another day we climbed the mountain.

It was one of my happiest moment in my life.

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Thank you for doing your homework. ^^

Because my parents always busy for working, we could only had a short trip.
>>Because my parents were always busy working, we could only have a short trip.

But, in that summer we had vacation for a week.
>>But, during that summer we had a vacation for a week.

my father parked a car near river or sea and my mother made meals.
>>My father parked the car near a river or the sea and my mother made meals.

It was one of my happiest moment in my life.
>>It was one of my happiest moments in my life.
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