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Q:Do you believe that the rich are growing richer, and the poor are growing poorer?
A:I'm not sure about that, but I think if the rich is entrepreneur then I think it's true.
Entrepreneur can get money almost infinity, so he or she can be more richer.
But if the poor don't give up trying, then someday, he or she can be a rich or public person.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I'm not sure about that, but I think if the rich is entrepreneur then I think it's true.

>> I'm not sure about that, but I think if the rich is an entrepreneur then I think it's true.
Entrepreneur can get money almost infinity, so he or she can be more richer.

>> Entrepreneurs can get money almost for infinity, so he or she can become richer.
But if the poor don't give up trying, then someday, he or she can be a rich or public person.
>> But if the poor don't give up trying, then someday, he or she can be a rich or popular person.

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