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What is your favorite childhood game and why?

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When I was a first grade of elementary school, I started playing Minecraft with my brother.
My parents didn't like video games so they didn't let us to play any video games when I was a kid.
And actually, in that period, I was not interested about video games.
But when I was a first grade of elementary school, I saw that my cousin is playing Minecraft.
Since that, I was interested about the video game, and I wanted to play it with my brother.
So my parents bought the game because I had a lot of good grades.
Since that, I played Minecraft with my brother and I think I played it for 7 years.

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Hi John! :)

Classic childhood games are timeless for a reason. Not only are they simple to grasp and fun to play, they also teach social skills and can enrich the lives of the young players. I t is because of this that many parents will often look to pass on their favorite childhood games to their offspring.

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When I was a first grade of elementary school, I started playing Minecraft with my brother.
>> When I was a first grader elementary school, I started playing Minecraft with my brother.

My parents didn't like video games so they didn't let us to play any video games when I was a kid.
>> My parents didn't like video games so they didn't let us to play any when we were kids. 

And actually, in that period, I was not interested about video games.
>> During that time, I was not interested in video games. 

But when I was a first grade of elementary school, I saw that my cousin is playing Minecraft.
>> But when I was in first grade, I saw my cousin playing it. 

Since that, I was interested about the video game, and I wanted to play it with my brother.
>> Since then, I became interested in the video game and wanted to play it with my brother. 

So my parents bought the game because I had a lot of good grades.
>> CORRECT

Since that, I played Minecraft with my brother and I think I played it for 7 years.
>> Since then, I've been playing it for 7 years. 
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