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1. What is the worst crime in your opinion? Is it prevalent in your country?

In my opinion, Vicious crimes to the weak is worst. I mean the crimes Against eldery, women, and even innocent children and animals. For example, there was a crime that teenaged grandsons murder their old grandmother stabbing with a knife many times. Even though she had raised the grandsons without their parents, they killed her because she had scolded them. Not same cases, but these kinds of crimes against the weak are increasing and getting crueler. So nowadays I don't feel like reading news articles anymore.. ;(

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Good evening, Yu Jeong! 

Thank you for answering the Composition question! :) Here's my comment for your answer :) 

Question: What is the worst crime in your opinion? Is it prevalent in your country?

Your answer: In my opinion, Vicious crimes to the weak is worst. I mean the crimes Against eldery, women, and even innocent children and animals. For example, there was a crime that teenaged grandsons murder their old grandmother stabbing with a knife many times. Even though she had raised the grandsons without their parents, they killed her because she had scolded them. Not same cases, but these kinds of crimes against the weak are increasing and getting crueler. So nowadays I don't feel like reading news articles anymore.. ;(

>> In my opinion, vicious crimes against the weak is the worst. For example, crimes against elderly, women, and even innocent children and animals. For example, there was a crime where teenage grandsons murdered their old grandmother by  stabbing her with a knife for a couple of times. Even though she was the one who raised her grandsons because the parents were not there, they still killed her simply because she scolded them. Crimes like these are increasing and getting more violent, so that's why I don't feel like reading news articles anymore. 

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Thank you for sharing this with me! I agree with you that it is disheartening to hear about news like these. :( We should find a way how to stop these vicious crimes so that we can have a more hopeful society. :) 


See you later in class! 

~Miya^^
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