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What is your favorite childhood game and why?

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I liked ¡®Zombie high school¡¯ that is killing zombies in the school. Because It was my first online game in my whole life. And I could play it with my friends.

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Hi Yun! :)

Classic childhood games are timeless for a reason. Not only are they simple to grasp and fun to play, they also teach social skills and can enrich the lives of the young players. I t is because of this that many parents will often look to pass on their favorite childhood games to their offspring.

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I liked ¡®Zombie high school¡¯ that is killing zombies in the school. 
>> I liked "Zombie high school". It is where you kill zombies in the school. 

Because It was my first online game in my whole life. 
>> It was my the first online game I've played. 

And I could play it with my friends.
>> I can also play it with my friends. 
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