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why the cellphone is important

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The cellphone is very important.
That is because when we don't have a cellphone, we can't to call for far people.
My second reason is we can't listen a music and listen music is very important from people.
My third reason is we can't to have information easily when we don't have cellphone
Finally, we can use cellphone to many things.

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The cellphone is very important.
>> Cellphones are very important. 

That is because when we don't have a cellphone, we can't to call for far people.
>> That is because when we don't have a cellphone, we can't call the people who live far from us.

My second reason is we can't listen a music and listen music is very important from people.
>> The second reason is that 
we can't listen to music without it, and listening to music is very important for people.

My third reason is we can't to have information easily when we don't have cellphone
>> The third reason is that we can't easily get information when we don't have one.

Finally, we can use cellphone to many things.
>> Finally, we can use cellphones for many things. 



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