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How can you judge what is the right amount of stress for you?

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If I face with some unexpecting situation which I can not control it myself, I get a lot stress. I do not think I can control amount of stress. But I know how I overcome it. Personally I need a time to be alone to think and take a rest without any disturbing. The time makes me think clearly without any emotional. And later when I am fully charged, I go out to walk. Whenever I walk, I feel my body and brain awakes and ready to do something. I know it is a right time I truly find the solution and face with the problem. That is my way to overcome from a stress. I do not like to ruin my life style due to a stress. Additionally watching a movie, eating delicious food and traveling are very wonderful ways to stress away.
It is easier for me to find the way of stress out rather than controlling an amount of stress.
Wow, it is the first homework and it is not easy than I thought. It's one of small but good new stress to me :-)

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Wow! Congratulations for your first successful homework, Kaycee! But I am sorry for giving you another little stress. I am always rooting for you!-Faith-
If I face with some unexpecting situation which I can not control it myself, I get a lot stress. 
>> If I'm face with some unexpected situations which I cannot control myself, I get a lot of stress. 
I do not think I can control amount of stress. 
>> I do not think I can control the right amount of stress. 
But I know how I overcome it. 
>> CORRECT
Personally I need a time to be alone to think and take a rest without any disturbing. 
>> Personally, I need time to be alone to think and take a rest without any disturbance. 
The time makes me think clearly without any emotional. 
>> That time makes me think clearly without being too emotional. 
And later when I am fully charged, I go out to walk. 
>> And later when I am fully charged, I go for a walk. 
Whenever I walk, I feel my body and brain awakes and ready to do something. 
>> Whenever I walk, I feel that my body and brain are awake and ready to do something. 
I know it is a right time I truly find the solution and face with the problem. 
>> I know it is the right time to truly find a solution and face the problem. 
That is my way to overcome from a stress. 
>> That is my way to overcome stress. 
I do not like to ruin my life style due to a stress. 
>> I do not like to ruin my lifestyle due to stress. 
Additionally watching a movie, eating delicious food and traveling are very wonderful ways to stress away.
>> Additionally, watching a movie, eating delicious food and traveling are very wonderful ways to de-stress.
It is easier for me to find the way of stress out rather than controlling an amount of stress.
>> It is easier for me to find a way to release my stress than controlling an amount of stress.
Wow, it is the first homework and it is not easy than I thought. 
>> CORRECT
It's one of small but good new stress to me :-)
>> It's one of the small but a good new stress to me :-)
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