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This is a really difficult topic.
I don't know much about North Korea.
North and South Korea use Hangul, but the meaning or the words are often different.
South Korea is democracy and North Korea is communism.
South Korea is capitalism and North Korea is socialism.
When South Koreans and North Koreans meet, their lifestyles are different, so I think a lot of exchange is needed.
When I met North Koreans, I felt that they were very rigid.
They hated taking pictures together.
They didn't have much expression.
I also felt that North Korean society was closed.

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This is a really difficult topic.
>> CORRECT

I don't know much about North Korea.
>> CORRECT

North and South Korea use Hangul, but the meaning or the words are often different.
>> CORRECT

South Korea is democracy and North Korea is communism.
>>South Korea is democratic country and North Korea is communist country.
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South Korea is capitalism and North Korea is socialism.
>> South Korea use capitalism and North Korea uses socialism.

When South Koreans and North Koreans meet, their lifestyles are different, so I think a lot of exchange is needed.
>> When South Koreans and North Koreans meet, their lifestyles are different, so I think a lot of changes is needed.

When I met North Koreans, I felt that they were very rigid.
>> CORRECT

They hated taking pictures together.
>> CORRECT

They didn't have much expression.
>> They didn't have much expressions.

I also felt that North Korean society was closed.
>> I also felt that the North Korean society was close.

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