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If i could be reincarnated..

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If I can be reborn, I want to be an honest politician.
When i kooked at government's failed policies and corrupt politicians now, I think one politician is having a lot of influence to the people and controlling their lives.
There's a word like this.
One smart person can save hundreds of people.
I want to develop the South Korea by living a life of an smart politician.

I asked this same question to my wife.
Contrary to what I thought, my wife wants to be born as a fire-fly.
The reason was that she wants to live a wonderful shining day until died.

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Hi Evan :)

Some people want to live a different life and some don't. At the end of the day, what matters is that we should be contented with the life that we have right now. :) 

PS: I actually agree with you that there are a lot of manipulating and corrupt politicians right now. 

I also think that your wife's idea is cute hahaha. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.
If I can be reborn, I want to be an honest politician.
>> CORRECT

When i kooked at government's failed policies and corrupt politicians now, I think one politician i
 having a lot of influence to the people and controlling their lives.
>>  When I look at the government's failed policies and corrupt politicians now, I think the a politician can really affect and control a lot of lives. 

There's a word like this.
>> CORRECT

One smart person can save hundreds of people.
>> CORRECT

I want to develop the South Korea by living a life of an smart politician.
>> I want to develop South Korea by living a life as a smart politician.

I asked this same question to my wife.
>> CORRECT

Contrary to what I thought, my wife wants to be born as a fire-fly.
>> CORRECT

The reason was that she wants to live a wonderful shining day until died.
>> The reason was that she wants to live as wonderful shining bug until she dies. 
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