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I think delivery service will be successful because many people make a delivery as they can't go outside.

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Hi Kane:)

The impact of COVID-19, particularly on the business world, couldn¡¯t have been predicted but has been an incredible learning experience—especially for aspiring entrepreneurs. Social distancing and remote work have forced traditional in-person businesses like restaurants, brick-and-mortar retail and event services to get creative with solutions and stay viable while also opening a world of opportunities for business owners to meet consumers¡¯ new and evolving needs that is why I think you suggestion is good. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think delivery service will be successful because many people make a delivery as they can't go outside.
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