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I think online streaming services they got the high sales.
People can not go out side everywhere because covid 19.
And then they be come find something do in home.
They watch the show or drama and movie,
Every people and every age usually like watch TV.
That's why I think about online streaming service get the successful during pendemic.

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Hi Ann:)

The impact of COVID-19, particularly on the business world, couldn¡¯t have been predicted but has been an incredible learning experience—especially for aspiring entrepreneurs. Social distancing and remote work have forced traditional in-person businesses like restaurants, brick-and-mortar retail and event services to get creative with solutions and stay viable while also opening a world of opportunities for business owners to meet consumers¡¯ new and evolving needs that is why I think you suggestion is good. 

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I think online streaming services they got the high sales.
>> I think online streaming services got high sales during this pandemic. 

People can not go out side everywhere because covid 19.
>> People can not go out side everywhere because of COVID-19.

And then they be come find something do in home.
>> People usually find something to do at home. 

They watch the show or drama and movie. 
>> They watch shows, dramas and movies. 

Every people and every age usually like watch TV.
>> Every person of every age usually like watching on TV. 

That's why I think about online streaming service get the successful during pendemic.
>> That's why I think online streaming services will be successful during the pandemic. 

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