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How different is North Korea from South Korea nowadays?

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How different is North Korea from South Korea nowadays?

North Korea has changed the old days.
People think that the relationship between the two koreas are improved than now.
If so, people of two koreas visit each other whenever we want to see their relatives.
It will take time, people believe will be come on that day

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North Korea has changed the old days.
>> North Korea has changed compared to the old days. 

People think that the relationship between the two koreas are improved than now.
>> People think that the relationship between the two countries have improved. 

If so, people of two koreas visit each other whenever we want to see their relatives.
>> If so, people in both countries can visit each other whenever we want to see their relatives.

It will take time, people believe will be come on that day
>> It will take time, but people believe that that day will come. 

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