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Q:Are there any problems with jellyfish or sharks at your local beach?
A:I think there are no jellyfishes or sharks at our local beach.
Mostly there are some fishes and clam at our local beach, and sometimes there are some small lobsters at our local beach.
Also, even if there are some jellyfishes at our local beach, I think that jellyfish would not have poison.

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Hello Paul !

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think there are no jellyfishes or sharks at our local beach.

>> CORRECT!
Mostly there are some fishes and clam at our local beach, and sometimes there are some small lobsters at our local beach.

>> Mostly, there are some fishes and clams at our local beach, and sometimes there are some small lobsters too.
Also, even if there are some jellyfishes at our local beach, I think that jellyfish would not have poison.

>> Even if there are some jellyfishes at our local beach, I think that jellyfish would not be poisonous.

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