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What kind of business do you think would be successful during this pandemic? Kindly explain your ans

작성자: 류*주
2021-10-05 215

회원님의 영작문

In this world, there are different business and I think the business about a media or movie, drama would be successful during this period.
The representative one is Netflix.
There are a lot of movies and dramas so we can watch various kinds of movies and dramas everywhere.
And I was curious about Netflix so I searched about it and the number of members were 200000000(two hundred million).
And the regular cost is about 8 dolors so they can earn about 1600000dolors in a month.
So I think the media business, like Netflix can be succesful during this pandamic.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi John:)

The impact of COVID-19, particularly on the business world, couldn’t have been predicted but has been an incredible learning experience—especially for aspiring entrepreneurs. Social distancing and remote work have forced traditional in-person businesses like restaurants, brick-and-mortar retail and event services to get creative with solutions and stay viable while also opening a world of opportunities for business owners to meet consumers’ new and evolving needs that is why I think you suggestion is good. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In this world, there are different business and I think the business about a media or movie, drama would be successful during this period.
>> In this world, there are different business and most of them are about media. 

The representative one is Netflix.
>> The number one representative is Netflix. 

There are a lot of movies and dramas so we can watch various kinds of movies and dramas everywhere.
>> There are a lot of movies and dramas that we can watch everywhere. 

And I was curious about Netflix so I searched about it and the number of members were 200000000(two hundred million).
>> I got curious so I searched about the statistics of Netflix and it says that there are over 200,000,000 users. 

And the regular cost is about 8 dolors so they can earn about 1600000dolors in a month.
>> The regular cost is about 8$ so they can earn about $1,600,000 a month. 

So I think the media business, like Netflix can be succesful during this pandamic.
>> So I think the media business, like Netflix can be successful during this pandemic.

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