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What kind of business do you think would be successful during this pandemic? Kindly explain your ans

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In this world, there are different business and I think the business about a media or movie, drama would be successful during this period.
The representative one is Netflix.
There are a lot of movies and dramas so we can watch various kinds of movies and dramas everywhere.
And I was curious about Netflix so I searched about it and the number of members were 200000000(two hundred million).
And the regular cost is about 8 dolors so they can earn about 1600000dolors in a month.
So I think the media business, like Netflix can be succesful during this pandamic.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi John:)

The impact of COVID-19, particularly on the business world, couldn’t have been predicted but has been an incredible learning experience—especially for aspiring entrepreneurs. Social distancing and remote work have forced traditional in-person businesses like restaurants, brick-and-mortar retail and event services to get creative with solutions and stay viable while also opening a world of opportunities for business owners to meet consumers’ new and evolving needs that is why I think you suggestion is good. 

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In this world, there are different business and I think the business about a media or movie, drama would be successful during this period.
>> In this world, there are different business and most of them are about media. 

The representative one is Netflix.
>> The number one representative is Netflix. 

There are a lot of movies and dramas so we can watch various kinds of movies and dramas everywhere.
>> There are a lot of movies and dramas that we can watch everywhere. 

And I was curious about Netflix so I searched about it and the number of members were 200000000(two hundred million).
>> I got curious so I searched about the statistics of Netflix and it says that there are over 200,000,000 users. 

And the regular cost is about 8 dolors so they can earn about 1600000dolors in a month.
>> The regular cost is about 8$ so they can earn about $1,600,000 a month. 

So I think the media business, like Netflix can be succesful during this pandamic.
>> So I think the media business, like Netflix can be successful during this pandemic.

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