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In this generation, personal priority be come focusing to me.
When some couple have a baby, they should to lose so many thing and need more power.
And prepare clothes, furniture, enviroment for baby.
I haven talk with friends with this topic, they said "If I have a baby, I think I feel getting more confused."
And then I think, I agreed.
Even my self, i want just have fun time with my future husband with out baby.
But I don't know when I'll changed my mind.

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Hi Ann:)

A growing number of couples who have been married for five years or less, especially those in which both partners work, are not having children. This is actually a personal choice but there are some consequences to the society, which is the decreasing economy. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In this generation, personal priority be come focusing to me.
>> In this generation, people are prioritizing themselves. 

When some couple have a baby, they should to lose so many thing and need more power.
>> When some couples have a baby, they should sacrifices a lot of things. 

And prepare clothes, furniture, enviroment for baby.
>> They also need to prepare clothes, furniture and a suitable environment for the baby. 

I haven talk with friends with this topic, they said "If I have a baby, I think I feel getting more confused."
>> I have talked with my friends regarding this topic and hey said "If I have a baby, I think I will get more confused. 

And then I think, I agreed.
>> I agreed with them. 

Even my self, i want just have fun time with my future husband with out baby.
>> Even myself, I just want to fun with my future husband without baby.

But I don't know when I'll changed my mind.
>> But I don't know if I'll changed my mind.

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