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What is your top priority nowadays? Share your answer in a few sentences.

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Nowadays, I almost totally focus on the application for the dermatology. There are so many things to prepare. I need to care about my work in the hospital, the Intern examination, the interview, and the letter of self-introduction. All those things are important when applying for the dermatology part. I try really hard to study everyday for the Intern exam. Since we Interns don't have enough time for study, I try to spend my time efficiently. Thus, I utilize the time left between the works. There are some time which nurses don't give me any call, then I try to study during that time. Moreover, doing well as a intern is also important, since all the evaluations on me come from all my behaviors in the hospital. Therefore, I try to perform all the procedures well and quickly. Finally, to prepare for the interview, I try to take an English speaking class everyday. Even though it is really simple and short class, I try to speak out English everyday, which might help me a lot later.

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Hi there again Vicky!

It's wonderful to see you here on the composition page once again! I know that you might have written this answer in between times when you have your break and I really do appreciate how you divide your time to execute your tasks to the best of your abilities. I am confident that you will get a very good evaluation from the hospital as no one works as hard as you do. In addition, the dermatology part is your expertise, hence, you will be fine on that part.

Well, you have never forgotten to organize your ideas in writing which I am very proud about you. Keep pushing and reaching your goals! Well done!

See you later. ^^

-T. Donna =)

Nowadays, I almost totally focus on the application for the dermatology.
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Nowadays, I almost totally focus on the application for the dermatology examination/ for dermatology.


There are so many things to prepare. I need to care about my work in the hospital, the Intern examination, the interview, and the letter of self-introduction. 
>> Correct!

All those things are important when applying for the dermatology part. I try really hard to study everyday for the Intern exam.
>> Correct!

 Since we Interns don't have enough time for study, I try to spend my time efficiently. Thus, I utilize the time left between the works. 
>> Correct!

There are some time which nurses don't give me any call, then I try to study during that time. Moreover, doing well as a intern is also important, since all the evaluations on me come from all my behaviors in the hospital. 
>> Correct!
Or: ...an intern is also...

Therefore, I try to perform all the procedures well and quickly. Finally, to prepare for the interview, I try to take an English speaking class everyday. Even though it is really simple and short class, I try to speak out English everyday, which might help me a lot later.
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