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My favorite thing is a basket ball sports
That is because basket ball sport can help exercising.
My second reason is when we play basket ball sport, we can grow were height.
My third reason I'm going to basketball school in 1 time in 1 week.
Finally, My basketball school is nearly in my home.

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Hello, Joey! Your effort is appreciated.  However, you have to study more on different sentence patterns and grammatical structures.

- Teacher Debbie


My favorite thing is a basket ball sports
>> My favorite sport is basketball.

That is because basket ball sport can help exercising.
>>  That is because basketball is a good exercise.

My second reason is when we play basket ball sport, we can grow were height.
>> The second reason why I like it is that when we play basketball, we can grow taller.

My third reason I'm going to basketball school in 1 time in 1 week.
>> Therefore, I go to my basketball school once a week.

Finally, My basketball school is nearly in my home.
>> It is near my home.
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