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Korean's personality almost they want everything quickly.
So some company used deliverded in day servies or half day delivered servies.
Especially, korea food delivery servies is so famous all over the world.
Because it's so simple and we can get the food everywhere.
But I worried about the traffic accidents.
Some food delivery company focusing just quickly.
And then delivery man get hurryed mind and dangerous ride. That would be coming big accidents.

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Hi Ann:)

Product delivery services have extended a lot of help to businesses. To put it bluntly, it would be quite impossible to get things from point A to point B without product delivery services, especially now that we¡¯re facing a pandemic. Due to COVID, our movement has been limited to lessen our chances of contracting the virus. It has been very difficult for everyone, and some businesses resorted to closing down because of lack of sustainability and resources to continue. That is why there is the need for improvements. 

PS: Yes, there are a lot of accidents happening so these companies should value their riders. :(

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Korean's personality almost they want everything quickly.
>> Korean's wants most things to be quick. 

So some company used deliverded in day servies or half day delivered servies.
>> So some companies use same-day or half-day delivery services.

Especially, korea food delivery servies is so famous all over the world.
>>Korean food delivery services is famous all over the world. 

Because it's so simple and we can get the food everywhere.
>> it's so convenient and we can get food anywhere.

But I worried about the traffic accidents.
>> CORRECT

Some food delivery company focusing just quickly.
>> Some food delivery company just focuses on the speed. 

And then delivery man get hurryed mind and dangerous ride. That would be coming big accidents.
>> The pressure the delivery men to be quick that can lead to big accidents. 
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