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Hi Jiyu:)

The impact of COVID-19, particularly on the business world, couldn¡¯t have been predicted but has been an incredible learning experience—especially for aspiring entrepreneurs. Social distancing and remote work have forced traditional in-person businesses like restaurants, brick-and-mortar retail and event services to get creative with solutions and stay viable while also opening a world of opportunities for business owners to meet consumers¡¯ new and evolving needs that is why I think you suggestion is good. 

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