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Why do you think there are some couples in South Korea that don\'t want to have kids?

작성자: 류*주
2021-10-06 338

회원님의 영작문

In the past, many couples had a lot of kids in South Korea.
But now, a lot of couples don't want to have a kid.
And I think there are a lot of reasons.
We have to spand a lot of times and money for a babe, but a lot of parents have to go to their work.
Before, most of families in South Korea were very big family, so they don't have to worry about a babe.
But now, most of families are just small families so they can't take care of their babe that much.
I think there are other reasons about it but I think it is the biggest reason of it.
So South Korea goverment is supporting all couples to have kids in their family member.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi John:)

A growing number of couples who have been married for five years or less, especially those in which both partners work, are not having children. This is actually a personal choice but there are some consequences to the society, which is the decreasing economy. 

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In the past, many couples had a lot of kids in South Korea.
>> CORRECT

But now, a lot of couples don't want to have a kid.
>> But now, a lot of couples don't want to have kids. 

And I think there are a lot of reasons.
>> I think there are a lot of reasons.

We have to spand a lot of times and money for a babe, but a lot of parents have to go to their work.
>> We have to spend a lot of time and money for a baby but a lot of parents have to go to work. 

Before, most of families in South Korea were very big family, so they don't have to worry about a babe.
>> Before, most of families in South Korea were very big , so they don't have to worry about their babies. 

But now, most of families are just small families so they can't take care of their babe that much.
>> But now, most of families are just small so they can't take care of their babies that much.

I think there are other reasons about it but I think it is the biggest reason of it.
>> I think there are other reasons but I think it is the biggest one. 

So South Korea goverment is supporting all couples to have kids in their family member.
>> So South Korea's government is supporting all couples who are having children. 

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