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How do you think can the delivery services in South Korea be improved?

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I think people who live alone are increase, so they want to eat meal fast and simply. And delivery app is improved by many people. Moreover, Korea have convenient for transportation.

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Hi Yun:)

Product delivery services have extended a lot of help to businesses. To put it bluntly, it would be quite impossible to get things from point A to point B without product delivery services, especially now that we¡¯re facing a pandemic. Due to COVID, our movement has been limited to lessen our chances of contracting the virus. It has been very difficult for everyone, and some businesses resorted to closing down because of lack of sustainability and resources to continue. That is why there is the need for improvements. 

PS: Yes, there are a lot of accidents happening so these companies should value their riders. :(

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I think people who live alone are increase, so they want to eat meal fast and simply. 
>> I think people who are living alone are increasing so they want to eat fast and simple food.

And delivery app is improved by many people. 
>> Delivery apps are also improved. 

Moreover, Korea have convenient for transportation.
>Moreover, Korea has convenient transportation.

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