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If there are not teachers, school will be disappeared. School is the place that consist of teachers and students. But the important role, teacher is not in the school, the school is not completed. Also, if there are not teachers then we lost the chance to respect other people, and we can't learn from the teachers. So I think that teachers are very important jobs all over the world.

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- Teacher Debbie

If there are not teachers, school will be disappeared.
>> If there were no teachers, schools would disappear.

 School is the place that consist of teachers and students.
>>  A school is a place that consists of teachers and students.

 But the important role, teacher is not in the school, the school is not completed. 
>> Teachers play an important role. If they were not in schools, schools wouldn't be complete.

Also, if there are not teachers then we lost the chance to respect other people, and we can't learn from the teachers. 
>> Furthermore, if there weren't teachers, we wouldn't learn to respect other people because we couldn't learn from them.

So I think that teachers are very important jobs all over the world.
>> Therefore, I think being a teacher is a very important job.

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