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Why do you think there are some couples in South Korea that don\'t want to have kids?

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I think that today's generation is highly educated by their parents and has a high level of education.
So they want to be recognized for doing professional work.
For them, marriage and children disturb to their social achievement.
Because they want to spend time and effort to do their job well instead of marriage and children.
Sometimes, they get married but don't have children or try to have them late.

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Hi Jennifer:)

A growing number of couples who have been married for five years or less, especially those in which both partners work, are not having children. This is actually a personal choice but there are some consequences to the society, which is the decreasing economy. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think that today's generation is highly educated by their parents and has a high level of education.
>> CORRECT

So they want to be recognized for doing professional work.
>> CORRECT

For them, marriage and children disturb to their social achievement.
>>For them, marriage and children disturb their social achievement.

Because they want to spend time and effort to do their job well instead of marriage and children.
>> These people want to spend their time and effort to do their job instead of getting married and having children.  

Sometimes, they get married but don't have children or try to have them late.
>> CORRECT
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