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What is the importance of getting vaccinated especially during a pandemic?

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Human have been living with various virus since they created. They have overcome infectious disease with their immune or vaccines. According to the news, it usually takes more than 10 years to invent new vaccine. All medications and medical techniques should be proved for a long time. If the safety of vaccines didn't proved by proper ways, there will be serious side effects. Doctors strongly ask people to receive vaccination and they say that it is the most effective way to prevent from contagious diseases, especially, if it is pandemic. We are living under the Covid-19 pandemic. Many people have already gotten vaccination but the vaccines released too earlier than it used to be. That's why many people hesitated to receive vaccination. There were a lot of people died after vaccination during pandemic. However, WHO and most governments said that the side effects after vaccination didn't directly related with shots. So, people believe that vaccines which were released aren't safe

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Hello, Mr. Hwang!^^
Thank you for taking the time to answer your homework. Let's stay healthy and be safe always so we can combat this pandemic.
Have a good day!^^
~Kelly^^
Human have been living with various virus since they created. 
>> Humans have been living with various viruses since they were created.
They have overcome infectious disease with their immune or vaccines. 
>> They have overcome infectious diseases with their immune system or vaccines.
According to the news, it usually takes more than 10 years to invent new vaccine.
>> According to the news, it usually takes more than 10 years to invent a new vaccine.  
All medications and medical techniques should be proved for a long time. 
>>All medications and medical techniques should be proven for a long time.
If the safety of vaccines didn't proved by proper ways, there will be serious side effects. 
>> If the safety of vaccines isn't proven in proper ways, there will be serious side effects.
Doctors strongly ask people to receive vaccination and they say that it is the most effective way to prevent from contagious diseases, especially, if it is pandemic. 
>> Doctors strongly ask people to receive vaccination and they say that it is the most effective way to prevent contagious diseases, especially in times of pandemic.
We are living under the Covid-19 pandemic. 
>> Correct.
Many people have already gotten vaccination but the vaccines released too earlier than it used to be. 
>> Many people have already gotten vaccinations but the vaccines were released too earlier than they used to be.
That's why many people hesitated to receive vaccination. 
>> That's why many people hesitated to receive vaccination.
There were a lot of people died after vaccination during pandemic. 
>> There were a lot of people who died after vaccination during the pandemic.
However, WHO and most governments said that the side effects after vaccination didn't directly related with shots. 
>> However, WHO and most governments say that the side effects after vaccination are not directly related to the vaccine.
So, people believe that vaccines which were released aren't safe
>> So, people believe that vaccines which were released aren't safe
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