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What is your favorite sight in your neighborhood?

--> The place where I live around is full of some stores and buildings. If I liked that kind of sight I could choose the sight that I like among them. However, I think that this area is just convenient for me, not good.
After I take a walk for about 30 minutes from my home, I can meet my favorite sight, Han River park.
Especially at night, It is so fantastic to walk around Han river. That's why I often visit there, even though it is not close.

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Hello there Bo Im!

Great to read about your favorite sight there in your neighborhood! It seems majestic as well as  romantic as you have vividly described it here on your short composition. It is very good to break away from the sight of concrete walls and buildings every once in a while.

I will see you tomorrow then in class. Thank you for sending me your answer for your homework!

-T. Donna =)

The place where I live around is full of some stores and buildings. 
>> Correct!

If I liked that kind of sight I could choose the sight that I like among them. 
>> Correct!

However, I think that this area is just convenient for me, not good.
>> Correct!
Or: However, I think that this area is just convenient for me, and it's not good.

After I take a walk for about 30 minutes from my home, I can meet my favorite sight, Han River park.
>> Correct!
Or: Han River Park

Especially at night, It is so fantastic to walk around Han river. 
>> Especially at night, it is so fantastic to walk around Han River. 

That's why I often visit there, even though it is not close.
>> Correct!
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