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Why I don\'t be a heavier

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I don't want be a heavier.
That is because when we get heavier, we can get obesity.
My second reason is when we get heavier, we can't do exercise easily.
My third reason is when we get heavier, we should do diet.
Finally, many people are dislike heavier.

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Hi, Joey! Your reply is the perfect answer to the given question. Terrific! Let me share to you the secrets so that you won't get heavier. First, eat many fruits and veggies. Second, exercise.

- Teacher Debbie


I don't want be a heavier.
>> I don't want to be heavier.

That is because when we get heavier, we can get obesity.
>> This is a good sentence.


My second reason is when we get heavier, we can't do exercise easily.
>> The second reason is when we get heavier, we can't easily exercise.

My third reason is when we get heavier, we should do diet.
>> The third reason is when  we get heavier, we should go on a diet.

Finally, many people are dislike heavier.
> Finally, many people dislike being heavy.

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