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What do you think is the hardest part about being a student? Explain your answer.

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First things first, students must study something.
And it is really hard to do because there is limit in human's memory.
Second, sometimes students think that it is so tired so we don't wanna study anymore.
A stress is very painful to us and it really harm people's mind.
And there are other things about hard things of being a student.
But I think two of the things are the most hard thing of being a student.
But we shouldn't give up being a student because someday, the study will give us a benefit for we.
So it is hard but we have to ignore the things and study hard for our future.

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Hi John:)

The most difficult part of being a student can be having the self-discipline to study every day and prepare for tests ahead of time. School should be treated like your job, and if you want to do well, you will need to put in the work.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

First things first, students must study something.
>> CORRECT

And it is really hard to do because there is limit in human's memory.
>> And it is really hard to do it because there is a limit in human's memory.

Second, sometimes students think that it is so tired so we don't wanna study anymore.
>> Second, sometimes students think that it is so tiring so we don't wanna study anymore.

A stress is very painful to us and it really harm people's mind.
>> Stress can be painful to us and it harms our minds. 

And there are other things about hard things of being a student.
>> There are more hard things about being a student. 

But I think two of the things are the most hard thing of being a student.
>> But I think two ate the hardest ones. 

But we shouldn't give up being a student because someday, the study will give us a benefit for we.
>> Although we shouldn't give up because we will benefit from it when we grow up. 

So it is hard but we have to ignore the things and study hard for our future
>> It is hard but we have to ignore the hard things and study harder for our future. 

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