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I'm not interested in politics, but I think Lee Jae-myung is a strong candidate.

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Those willing to serve suggested someone may be qualified to lead. Public service is just that, serving the needs of the people above the needs of self. One must also consider, as a servant leader, if you are the best person for the job or if someone else is more equipped and ¡°meant for this hour¡± vs you. A servant serves the better good of the people, not the best interests and desires of you the candidate.

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