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How do you handle naughty children?

작성자: 류*선
2021-10-13 319

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When I was a Pre-kid student, my teacher asked my mom "Has Jisun autism?" My mom said, "No! She is normal!" I didn't say anything when I went to school. I didn't know why I didn't say anything. I was just a shy girl. My personality changed a lot during growing up.
People often judge people by their appearance. When children are naughty, there are special reasons and a backgrounds. We have to check it first and try to handle them.
In my case, when my daughter is naughty, I don't try to be angry because her behavior is natural. I need to try to understand her. I want to deal with my daughter with love. I have to pay attention to her with love and patience because she doesn't speak well. I always think about her feelings and needs. Sometimes, I know that I make mistakes with her because I'm not a perfect mom. So I would like to find the best way to relate with her. I'm learning from her. While my daughter is growing up, my husband and I also are growing too.

Thank you!!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Jane! I can really feel your love towards your daughter. Thank you for sharing your motherhood challenges and enjoyment!-Faith-
When I was a Pre-kid student, my teacher asked my mom "Has Jisun autism?" 
>> When I was a preschool student, my teacher asked my mom, "Does Jisun have autism?" 
My mom said, "No! She is normal!" 
>> CORRECT
I didn't say anything when I went to school. 
>> CORRECT
OR When I was at school, I wouldn't speak.
I didn't know why I didn't say anything. 
>> CORRECT
I was just a shy girl. 
>> CORRECT
OR I was an introvert.
My personality changed a lot during growing up.
>> My personality changed a lot while growing up.
People often judge people by their appearance. 
>> CORRECT
OR People often judge others outwardly.
When children are naughty, there are special reasons and a backgrounds. 
>> When children are naughty, there are special reasons and backgrounds there. 
We have to check it first and try to handle them.
>> We have to check it first and try to handle them nicely.
In my case, when my daughter is naughty, I don't try to be angry because her behavior is natural. 
>> CORRECT
I need to try to understand her. 
>> CORRECT
I want to deal with my daughter with love. 
>> CORRECT
I have to pay attention to her with love and patience because she doesn't speak well. 
>> I have to pay attention to her with love and patience because she can't speak well yet. 
I always think about her feelings and needs. 
>> CORRECT
Sometimes, I know that I make mistakes with her because I'm not a perfect mom. 
>> CORRECT
So I would like to find the best way to relate with her. 
>> CORRECT
OR I always want to connect with her.
I'm learning from her. 
>> I'm learning from her also. 
While my daughter is growing up, my husband and I also are growing too.
>> While my daughter is growing up, my husband and I are growing too.
Thank you!!
>> CORRECT
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