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Q:What are some of the things that you do not give as gifts in your country?
A:I think everything can be gift for someone or something, but people do not give something what's already provided.
Most of people do not give water or air to someone for gift, because these two things are already provided things.
But I think everything can be gift to everything that is existing in the world because everything is necessary to something.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think everything can be gift for someone or something, but people do not give something what's already provided.

>> I think everything can be given as a gift to someone, but people do not give something that's already provided.
Most of people do not give water or air to someone for gift, because these two things are already provided things.

>> Most people do not give water or air as a gift to someone, because these two things are already naturally provided.
But I think everything can be gift to everything that is existing in the world because everything is necessary to something.

>> But I think everything can be a gift to everything that is existing in the world because everything is necessary to something.

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