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What characteristics should we look for in a candidate who is running for president in your country?

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Many president candidates in Korea often slander one another.
I think it is one of the bad things but they keep doing it.
Also most of them have similar political opinions depend on the trends.
So I think president candidates in Korea must change these.
They shouldn't slander one another.
It shows that the candidate is very bad person even the slandered one is a criminal.
And they have to think and show their own opinion about the society.
It will show the wise and willingness about the candidate.
And we have to find those of things in the president candidates in Korea.

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Hi John:)

Those willing to serve suggested someone may be qualified to lead. Public service is just that, serving the needs of the people above the needs of self. One must also consider, as a servant leader, if you are the best person for the job or if someone else is more equipped and ¡°meant for this hour¡± vs you. A servant serves the better good of the people, not the best interests and desires of you the candidate.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Many president candidates in Korea often slander one another.
>> CORRECT

I think it is one of the bad things but they keep doing it.
>> CORRECT

Also most of them have similar political opinions depend on the trends.
>> Most of them have similar political opinions and it depends on the trends. 

So I think president candidates in Korea must change these.
>> CORRECT

They shouldn't slander one another.
>> CORRECT

It shows that the candidate is very bad person even the slandered one is a criminal.
>> It shows that the candidate is a very bad person when they slander another one. 

And they have to think and show their own opinion about the society.
>> They have to think and show their own objective for the society.

It will show the wise and willingness about the candidate.
>> It will show their willingness and intelligence as candidates. 

And we have to find those of things in the president candidates in Korea.
>> We need to find these things in a candidate running as president in South Korea. 

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