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Electricity helps our life more convenience and make easy for many houseworks.
Thanks to electricity, we can do many things at night even it¡¯s too dark.
Without electricity we have to do many things by ourselves without any helps from electric goods such as vacuum cleaner, washing machine.
Also we have to stay at home every night because we can see nothing without electricity.
If we can¡¯t use air conditioner and heater, summer and winter are gonna be terrible.

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Hi Jinny!
Thank you for always being diligent.
This will help you in your quest to improve. 
Good luck!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Electricity helps our life more convenience and make easy for many houseworks.
>> Electricity makes our life more convenient and makes it easy for us to do housework. 
Thanks to electricity, we can do many things at night even it¡¯s too dark.
>> Correct
Without electricity we have to do many things by ourselves without any helps from electric goods such as vacuum cleaner, washing machine.
>> Without electricity, we have to do many things by ourselves without any help from electric devices such as vacuum cleaners, washing machines.
Also we have to stay at home every night because we can see nothing without electricity.
>> Correct
If we can¡¯t use air conditioner and heater, summer and winter are gonna be terrible.
>> Correct
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