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I don't have any fear. But if I have to say it, I'm afraid of getting injured when I work out. The reason is
It's because I can't work out. Without working out,
I love working out so much that much.

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Hi Yubi:)

Fear and anxiety can last for a short time and then pass, but they can also last much longer and you can get stuck with them. In some cases they can take over your life, affecting your ability to eat, sleep, concentrate, travel, enjoy life, or even leave the house or go to work or school. This can hold you back from doing things you want or need to do, and it also affects your health.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I don't have any fear. 
>> CORRECT

But if I have to say it, I'm afraid of getting injured when I work out. 
>>But if I have to say one, I'm afraid of getting injured when I work out. 

The reason is It's because I can't work out. 
>>The reason is I won't be able to work out. 

Without working out, I love working out so much that much.
>> I love working out so much. 
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