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What are your fears and how are you going to overcome them?

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I had a lot of fears when I was younger than now.
And it was just about small things like a fear about monster or somethings like that.
But now, I don't have those kinds of fears.
Just I have a little fear about some insects or bees.
Now I am thinking that I was so strange because I just had a fear about monsters.
So I thought that those of fears are just useless things in my life.
But I recognized that we can grow with those fears.
If I don't had any fears, than I think I was not able to be me.
So I had those kinds of fears when I was young, and I think fears are very neccessary things in my life.

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Hi John :)

Fear and anxiety can last for a short time and then pass, but they can also last much longer and you can get stuck with them. In some cases they can take over your life, affecting your ability to eat, sleep, concentrate, travel, enjoy life, or even leave the house or go to work or school. This can hold you back from doing things you want or need to do, and it also affects your health.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I had a lot of fears when I was younger than now.
>> I had a lot of fears when I was younger. 

And it was just about small things like a fear about monster or somethings like that.
>> Most of them are small things like fear of monsters. Something like that. 

But now, I don't have those kinds of fears.
>> CORRECT

Just I have a little fear about some insects or bees.
>> Just I have a little fear for insects. 

Now I am thinking that I was so strange because I just had a fear about monsters.
>> Now that I am thinking about it, I feel silly because I had a fear for monsters. 

So I thought that those of fears are just useless things in my life.
>> So I thought, those fears are useless. 

But I recognized that we can grow with those fears.
>> I recognize now that we can grow with our fears. 

If I don't had any fears, than I think I was not able to be me.
>> If I didn't have any fears before, I wouldn't be the person that I am today. 

So I had those kinds of fears when I was young, and I think fears are very neccessary things in my life.
>> So the fears that I had in my life before are necessary for the life that I have right now. 
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