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There are 5 flowers in my house. Roses are my mom's favorite flowers. Sunflowers are my favorite flowers. Carnations are my dad's favorite flowers. Sunflowers are my favorite flowers. Hydrangea and tulips are my grandmother's favorite flowers. My family likes flowers.

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Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

There are 5 flowers in my house. 
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Roses are my mom's favorite flowers. 
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Sunflowers are my favorite flowers. 
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Carnations are my dad's favorite flowers. 
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Sunflowers are my favorite flowers. 
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Hydrangea and tulips are my grandmother's favorite flowers.
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 My family likes flowers.
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