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Dear Don,

It is a autumn season now. Many tree are going to change their leaf's color as a red(deep red, light red and so on0
As I said, I want to go to Santiago Pilgrimage. I watched this place from Youtube and portal site.
As far as I know, this road is 800 km totally. so I have to walk over 12days, if I walk all of this road.
So, there are a lot of inns and house for the traveler.
As you know, my company is from Spain. so I think, when I work here, I will have a chance to go this country and I can go to the place.
After finishing this Covid19, we can go everywhere with trouble.
If you go abroad after this pandemic, which country do you want to go? where do you want to go?
Please let me know your opinion.^^

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Hi Andrew!

Happy Monday, see you later in our class ^^

T. DON

Dear Don,

It is a autumn season now. Many tree are going to change their leaf's color as a red(deep red, light red and so on0
>> It is Autumn season now. Many trees are going to change their leaves' color into deep red, light red and so on.

As I said, I want to go to Santiago Pilgrimage. I watched this place from YouTube and portal site.
>> As I said, I want to go to Santiago Pilgrimage. I watched this place from YouTube and from other portal sites.

As far as I know, this road is 800 km totally. so I have to walk over 12days, if I walk all of this road.
>> As far as I know, this road is 800 km in total. If I will walk on this road, I have to walk for over 12 days.

So, there are a lot of inns and house for the traveler.
>> There are a lot of inns and houses for rent for travelers.

As you know, my company is from Spain. so I think, when I work here, I will have a chance to go this country and I can go to the place.
>> As you know, my company is from Spain. So I think, when I work here, I will have a chance to go to this country and go to that place.

After finishing this Covid19, we can go everywhere with trouble.
>> When this Covid19 pandemic ends, we can go anywhere without troubles.

If you go abroad after this pandemic, which country do you want to go? where do you want to go?
>> If you will go abroad after this pandemic, which country do you want to go and where do you want to go?

Please let me know your opinion.^^
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